[quote]it was good ino there is only one line of diolage in the scene but try to be alittle more orignal with it it seems as if u were intentially tryin to write like tarantino, other than that it was good i liked how the killing scene was filmed and the lollypop thing.
Oo yea i forgot i liked the pulp fiction referance too i was surprised when he came in with the chainsaw and highly amused.
Thanks! Noted as well.
Yeah, I’ll definitely work to be more orginal. I totally admit was ripping off QT in this one, but some of the QT like stuff I didn’t realize was QT like at the time. Like the last bit of a dialogue, that’s a conversation I had with my friend in a Icky Mickey’s, so I figured why the hell not… And tossed it in. In retrospect, it’s like yeah I was totally ripping off QT, but indirectly! Then again if we hadn’t been on a Pulp Fiction high at the time maybe we wouldn’t have had the conversation at all.
Oh yeah and the Mr. White name wasn’t intended to be a res dogs reference, I created the character before I saw res dogs and wrote some short stories and shit about him, his name being Jack White (reference to the white stripes BTW) but he liked to be addressed as Mr. White because it sounded more professional. Then I saw res dogs and I was “shit now everyone will think I was ripping it off”. I’m still trying to find a new name, but nothing seems to stick quite as well.
I also forgot to mention in my original post that after the credits there is a kind of funny “the end” freeze frame deal.