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VAGRANT or You can only imagine!


#1

ok heres the first 3 pages of my script about a vagrant.

i’m only posting 3 pages because not many people like to read so, anyway.

i haven’t written for a while and just testing if i still can.

here it is, tell me what you think and i’ll give you a giant size hug.



VAGRANT OR YOU CAN ONLY IMAGINE< NOT SURE WHICH TITLE I’LL USE.



INT. WAREHOUSE 1930’S - NIGHT



A crowd is heard.



A man with a bag over his head moves frantically from side to side.

He is GILLEAN DOHERTY.



Gillean holds his head and is hit twice in both ears.



A large number of men in bowler hats surrounds Gillean, along with three others also wearing bags.



The three other fighters beat each other up while Gillean tries to hide.



A member of the crowd grabs him and throws him into the group of fighters.



They knock him down almost instantly.



The crowd takes his bag off and reveals a battered Irish man with blood dripping from his ears.



CROWD MEMBER

(shouting)

His out!



Gillean crawls towards his bag and grasps it in his hands, while the other fighters fight.



EXT. SLUMS - NIGHT



Gillean huddles over a small pond scrubbing his sacred bag.



Laughter is heard in the background.



OLD MAN (O.S.)

You OK kid?



Gillean doesn’t hear him.



The old man walks over and nudges him.



OLD MAN (CONT’D)

I said you OK?



The old man inspects Gillean’s ears.



He seems worried.



GILLEAN

(shouting)

Just grand old man, grand



Gillean glances at him slightly.



OLD MAN

You doing them fights again,

ain’t ya?



Gillean doesn’t respond.



The old man hands him a bottle of booze and Gillean reluctantly takes it.



OLD MAN (CONT’D)

Look kid, I gotcha a present



The old man reaches for his coat and grabs a small cloth map.



He holds out a map.



GILLEAN

(shouting)

I don’t want your charity old man



OLD MAN

It ain’t charity, it’s a present, a gift



GILLEAN

(shouting)

A gift?



OLD MAN

Yeah



GILLEAN

You’ve never given me a gift before



OLD MAN

It’s a map



GILLEAN

(shouting and laughing)

A map?, You old fool



OLD MAN

It’ll help ya, kid, make you rich



Gillean laughs, stands up and walks away



OLD MAN (CONT’D)

(shouting)

You can’t keep doing this, it ain’t good

for you, you know it ain’t healthy!



The old man follows.



OLD MAN (CONT’D)

(shouting)

Your wasting your life kid



Gillean stop and turns around.



GILLEAN

(shouting)

I’m wasting MY life, you old fool, look

at you, you should be saying that same

thing to your self



OLD MAN

My life is already gone, Gillean,

there ain’t nothing left for me in

this world



Gillean angrily turns around and runs off.



The old man runs after him and grabs Gillean from behind.



OLD MAN (CONT’D)

People get old Gillean, they get old fast,

it doesn’t last forever, don’t waste it

getting beat up



The old man places the map into his coat pocket and lets him go.



Gillean turns around, pushes the old man over and runs off down the makeshift streets of the slums.



Soooooooooooooooooo, What do ya think?


#2

I like it. Very well written. The only thing that bugged me is that

Gillean seemed to call the old man, old man too many times.

It started to feel repetitive. Knocking the old man over and running

away felt a little weird too.


#3

holds promise, but things happen too fast. build up to the point a bit more. it seems to be important. if it goes by too fast, we might miss it.