Hey don’t get me wrong- I liked the script well enough, it just seems that the dialouge is a little forced- like you’re trying to edge in puns and funny stuff- without it sounding all that natural.
But hey, its alright- and take what I say with a pinch of salt anyways- I have just got two short scripts under my belt after all. But all the same the characters are a bit cliche- but this only Act I I guess.
