Thanks for the feedback. I can kinda see what your saying about it
sounding forced. I think that because the opening ten pages of the
script are pretty much just a conversation in a bar I ended up rushing
into the action.
As far as Mark’s reaction’s go I think that really just depends on how
the actor chooses to play it/how the reader chooses to read it. I
personally feel he’s sort of in shock from killing a woman with a lamp.
I’ll probly cut down his dialogue a bit but he’s the only character that
can explain what happened. I think if I cut the “I think it’s zombies”
line that’ll fix things a bit. But yeah, it needs work.
