ANDREW
Come on, Greg, where are you?
This line is like talking to the audience. Like the line, “Toolshed!”. Maybe he should just look at a clock. Actually the fact he’s standing around should show hes waiting for something.
And the dead end. I have never seen a dead end in a city, do they really exist? And why do guys always magically run into them. :-</E> I’m not a big fan of vomiting either.
The parts I do like are when he looks into the car, and climbing up and getting shocked, both are pretty intriguing. Plus the fact the guy in the car isn’t Greg.
