First off I think the action of it is great. You do a good job of building tension
here. The “Come on, Greg, where are you?” line helps add surprise when we
find out it’s the wrong car and the vomiting on the roof totally makes sense
not just because of fatigue but because he’s being chased by a guy with a
fucking gun. What I don’t get though is why the guy would keep the gun pointed
at the tied up woman rather than on Andrew and why the guy would just leave
the woman there while he chased after Andrew. I realize you posted this awhile
ago but I’m just seeing it now.
