Please rate this short excerpt from my Sitcom script

"So I was checking out porn at our video rental place…"



This comes too early. We need more of Bruce avoiding the question.



"

BRUCE

I meant Hilton Boulevard. So I was there and -



PAUL

You were gone for twenty minutes.



BRUCE

Uhm, yes I was. So then I looked and -



PAUL

It takes thirty minutes to get there.



Dead silent. Bruce freezes.



Paul looks understandingly Bruce, as to say: ‘I know’.



BRUCE

Okay! I was looking for porn!



SARAH

(impressed)

Good job, detective.



GEORGE

Bruce loves porn!



PAUL

Am I on fire or what?



BRUCE

Yeah, just thanks for making me say “I watch porn” in front of a woman.

"



Otherwise, just pure A gold. I really love how Paul just clinches to the opportunity of making a friend embarrassed.



Please, post more. Don’t wanna tell anything about what the sitcom is about? Other than Friends? ;D