My First Script

I know it’s been awhile but I’ve got a question about the pacing for those

of you who read this. Lately I’ve ben getting mixed reviews. Some people

seem to think that there’s too many scenes in the script with conversation,

or too much “downtime” as they call it. But then the other reviews are just

the opposite where they think I didn’t do a good enough job building relationships

between characters.



Now, it’s been almost a month since I’ve read the the thing and I’m about to

give it another re-write but I’m not sure what to fix. I know for sure I want

to work to make Brittany a little more innocent but I don’t want to slow things

down too much. I’m kinda thinking about writing a drunk-draft and just seeing

what happens.