Heres the start of my western. i’m not very good at formatting and there’s probally alot of typoes but i just want to know what the people of the world thinks about it so here it is.
Something to do with mexico
INT. SLAVE QUARRY UTAH 1860 - MIDDAY
The sun shines over 108 slave working on a quarry. They are chained in pair and wielding mattock picks.
One of the pairs are Sebastian and Thomas. Thomas is wearing a scruffy black hat.
As they pound at the rocky quarry wall Thomas, 47, African, stops, takes off his hat, throws it near Sebastian and lays down on the ground.
You know my name really ainÃ¢â‚¬â„¢t Thomas
Sebastian continues to hit the quarry wall, glancing at theÃ‚Â hat every few seconds.
How long have you been here?
Sebastian doesnÃ¢â‚¬â„¢t answer.
IÃ¢â‚¬â„¢ve been here 33 years, can you believe
that 33 years, thatÃ¢â‚¬â„¢s almost a lifetime, hell
that is a lifetime
A man walks past them with a tied up slave trailing behind him. He is EDWARD.
The man signals a near by slave driver over to the two slaves.
As the slave driver walks slowly toward Thomas, he stands up and puts on his hat.
The slave driver, about three metre away from him now, picks up a rock from the ground.
Thomas stands there kind of smiling until the man is right next to him.
The slave driver swings with the rock, hitting Thomas in the head and knocking him to the quarry floor.
As Thomas falls to the ground he quickly grabs the manÃ¢â‚¬â„¢s nine shot Lemat revolver.
Sebastian now focussing all his concentration on the quarry walls continues to work, ignoring whatÃ¢â‚¬â„¢s happening behind him.
Thomas cocks the gun and points it at the Petrified slave driver.
He gets up and puts the gun in the mans mouth and pulls to trigger. The man falls to the ground, squirms a bit then dies.
Thomas wipes the blood from his wound and begins to walk, dragging Sebastian behind him. He stops points the gun at the chain starts shooting it, blowing it to pieces.
Suddenly another slave driver comes running toward the two with a rifle and shoots Thomas in the throat, He then shoots back killing him instantly.
As Thomas slowly descends to the ground below he give the revolver to Sebastian.
My name ainÃ¢â‚¬â„¢t Thomas!
Sebastian looks down at the now dead Thomas emotionless, picks up the hat and walks away.
EXT. SLAVE QUARRY UTAH 1860 - MIDDAY
Edward, now about 400 metre from the two slaves, meets an elderly man in front of a single room cabin. The old man is JOE the owner of the quarry.
As Edward walks toward Joe, the slave begins to struggle.
I shot her
Joe, now enraged with anger, punches Edward in the face.
You shot my horse
ItÃ¢â‚¬â„¢s just a horse
But it was my horse Ed, it was mine
Would you feel this much anger if I popped a bullet in my brain?
Yes Edward and do you know why?
Edward ignores him and changes the subject.
Lets go inside
SFX: gun shot
Edward turns around, hearing the gunshot from ThomasÃ¢â‚¬â„¢s gun and then walks inside the cabin with Joe and the slave.
INT. JOEÃ¢â‚¬â„¢S CABIN - MIDDAY
Inside of the cabin is a a bookshelf full of books, two beds, one with a mattress and one without.
Edward pushes the slave toward Joe, who throws him on the bed without the mattress.
On the wall next to the bed are a sledge hammer, a two by four and five crutches.
As Joe begins to tie the slave on the bed, Edward walks over to the bookshelf.
I need a book on Cuba
Well what the hell would you want a book on Cuba for?
I heard it was nice down there
Joe puts the two by four between the slaves ankles.
Yeah nice, IÃ¢â‚¬â„¢m thinking about moving there
And how will you be moving there?
I thought you could maybe loan me some money
Joe picks up the sledge hammer and lifts it over his head.
Edward, still looking at the bookshelf glances at a mirror showing Joe, swinging the sledgehammer into the slaveÃ¢â‚¬â„¢s ankle, breaking it instantly
Edward, how much do you owe me already
About a thousand
Is that all
IÃ¢â‚¬â„¢ll pay you off next slave I bring in
And if I lend you this money, how will you be paying it back
Joe unties the slave and hands him a crutch.
Now itÃ¢â‚¬â„¢ll take a while to get use to the hole crutch
thing but youÃ¢â‚¬â„¢ll soon get it, Ted will take care of you
The slaves nods and walks outside.
Edward becomes silent and turns to the bookshelf, he finds a book on Cuba and hides it in his coat.
Suddenly Ted enters the cabin.
A slaves dead and ones got away
Is that all
Ethan and Charlie have also past on
You mean there dead
Joe looks at Edward.
IÃ¢â‚¬â„¢ll give him a day and I need another horse
Your not seriously thinking about going to Cuba?
I donÃ¢â‚¬â„¢t know
this is just a draft, i just typed it up on the computer a minute ago