[quote=“CopperHead”]
I think itll be something like this:
Mr Brown: Dick, dick, dick, dick, dick, dick, dick, dick dick.
Mr Orange: I’m gonna die!
Mr Pink: We were set up!
Mr Blonde: I got something you guys are gonna like.
Marvin Nash: Don’t torcher me please!
ear cuts cut off
Marvin: AHHH!
Orange shoots Blonde
Orange: I’m a cop.
Joe: This guy set us up!
White, Eddie, and Joe shoot each other
Orange: I’m a cop larry!
Bang! Bang!
The end
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I tried pacing that to 30 seconds…you’re about 8-9 seconds short! You need a bit more dialogue. How about “Okay ramblers…let’s get ramblin’.” and “I’m acting like a professional!”